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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence , while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways . What is your opinion ?

#people #success #measure #intelligence
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people
 achieving
success
 is the most effective way to
measure
 human
intelligence
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however
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 part of
people
 believe that
intelligence
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 to my mind and I believe is that
success
 is not a component to
measure
people
's talent.
To begin
 with , the most rational justification is that humans bring their
intelligence
 with their birth through genetics and inheritance.
In addition
 , having a high IQ is something they inherit from their parent.
furthermore
 , it is possible to
measure
 the level of
this
intelligence
 by special computer tests designed
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 experts in
this
 field .
also
 ,
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due to
 the advancement of technology , tools
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 been made in
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laboratories .
In addition
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 the degree of talent , it is quality can be developed to some extent .
For example
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measures how the brain works . Yet another compelling argument
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this
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wich
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 can be measured by
people
's
success
 . is that some
people
 have low
intelligence
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because of the wealth and status that their family has given them . They have been able to achieve
success
 and
this
 is exactly what has nothing to do with their
intelligence
.
For example
, ordinary
people
 with a lot of money hire smart
people
 to use their
intelligence
 for more productivity . To sum up , considering the points discussed
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a bove
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 the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that there are tools and methods to
measure
 IQ and human talent .
success
 is not an accurate
measure
 to determine the level of
intelligence
 of
people
.
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