In many countries athletes earn much more money than professional like doctor, teachers or engineers.why do you think this happens and consider it is good or bad

Nowadays, there
are
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a great contrast between sportsmen's income and the
others
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jobs
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salary.
Consequently
, there has been a lot of economic and social controversy surrounding
this
issue. I strongly disagree with
this
difference and I think it should be disappeared as soon as possible.
Firstly
, we should ask the question that why do sports clubs have a tendency to pay
such
a big
money
to them? In
this
regard, it should be mentioned, the investors when noticed they can make
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noticeable
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noticable
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profit with the lowest risk, made a decision to invest
money
in sports.
That is
usually because people are much interested in spending time
entertaining
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,
as a result
, entertainers
such
as athletes earn more
money
.
For example
, Neymar for his debut at PSG had been receiving about five hundred thousand euros per week which
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genuinely
genuenly
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genuinely
unbelievable when you compare it with an engineer's salary which is about five thousand euros each month.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of normal people in different social classes
such
as the middle class or educated class who make a living hardly. Correspondingly, societies in which there are unfair contradictions between a football player and a teacher or a doctor
,
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will be faced with fundamental social problems. In my opinion, the governments should make a remarkable effort to eliminate
this
great
distinct
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and try to stop the increasing economic gap in the community.
For instance
, increasing tax and
then
investing it as some bonuses to the other occupations can be a wise decision. In conclusion, modern life theories and
also
peoples'
willing
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to
spending
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time and
money
for
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entertainment have been
negative
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impact on various aspects of society. One of its consequences is paying countless
money
to athletes
by
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sponsors. Appropriately, national organizations should find both cultural and economic ways to tackle
this
phenomenon.
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