Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open space in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A widely discussed problem in our country is building houses or planting trees
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. The following paragraphs discussed whether agree or disagree and reach a reasonable conclusion. The most important reason for the decrease of oxygen in our life is precisely the rapid development of trees and people as the number of people increases so does the demand for houses because nowadays when people are developing
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example, the construction industry is accelerating buildings, factories are being built
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protect the environment. The summer was very hot due to the destruction of many forests and there was a massive heat wave and there were wildfires around the world. In the
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the ice melted some treated water
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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