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Today more and more tourists are visiting where condition are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefit and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places

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Nowadays all
people
 like to go out for their vacations with their families and friend. They visit many places for a holiday. There has been an increase in tourists every year. More than lakhs of
people
 are going on vacation. As the questions say they are visiting where
condition
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the condition
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 is difficult
such
 as the Sahara desert , it is not necessary that the person will go
to
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there and sand dunes will come and something will happen with them , they always carry their guide with them so that they can explore it properly. The benefits are
people
 can explore the new world and can enjoy with their families as many of
people
 are travelling some amount of profits are given that country so that there is an equality between them. The disadvantages are that some
people
 think that wasting money on
guide
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 is
waste
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 and waste of time they take us to places where we can explore it. If there is some issue it will be very difficult for him to face it. It is not about
people
stop
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visiting
visting
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visiting
 or travelling, but sometimes
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situation
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situtation
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situation
 does not support one's in that.
oneshould
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one should
should
 always be smart to
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move
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mov e
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move
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 with the help of
guide
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a guide
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 or a person who stays there because he is the right one to know
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what's
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whats
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 going to happen and when it will happen and helps a lot to
safe
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 one's life .
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