Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

Many concerned parties today feel that
crime
has already been reduced as much as is realistically possible. While I agree
this
may be true in nations where security is prioritized over privacy rights, there is still tremendous progress that can be made globally. Those who argue
crime
no longer needs addressing point to technological innovations.
This
situation is most apparent in authoritarian nations. Security surveillance can include the use of street cameras, digital tracking, and eavesdropping on private communications.
For instance
, in South Korea the
crime
rate in most urban areas is negligible and the average person reports little anxiety about possible criminality,
in contrast
to periods in the past when there were more instances of robbery, assault, theft, pickpocketing, and so on. These technological shifts have greatly aided law enforcement in prosecuting criminals thereby
also
increasing the deterrence of potential offences.
However
,
crime
still exists and can be countered by addressing the deeper, societal roots. The main cause of all
crime
is poverty. When individuals earn a wage sufficient to maintain a decent standard of living, the entire motive for most crimes disappears. The evidence for
this
is that in wealthy countries where there is a relatively even distribution of wealth, the
crime
rates are low and the police do not require draconian punishment or surveillance techniques. Beyond income, it is
also
possible to invest in improving mental health. Many people today spend too much time online and are vulnerable to extremist views. A still significant proportion of crimes could be eliminated by encouraging people to spend more time outdoors in their community. In conclusion, though technology has reduced certain kinds of criminality greatly, it is still possible to lower
crime
rates by embracing a holistic, societal approach. The complete eradication of
crime
is likely impossible and
therefore
there will always be a need to make progress
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