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People from poor and rural background find it difficult to get a university education.Some people think that government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Whether
government
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shoud
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should
 provide
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a free-college
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free-college
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free college
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 policy or not is considered
as
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a controversial topic of interest among students . The writer of
this
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essay
 agrees with that notion
due to
 the increase in
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 quality
as well as
 allowing people who have poor
background
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backgrounds
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 to land a decent job . It must be recognised that the action of
government
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the government
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 abolishing tuition fees in
university
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universities
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 creates a more educated
workfoce
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workforce
.
That is
 to say , the demand from the recruiters in the recent era
have
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 been increasing inexorably as they require not only
a
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higher qualifications but
also
 actual skills which can be gained from the
university
 course .
Thus
 , if everyone is entitled to
university
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a university
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 education , they can learn and
achive
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achieve
 these useful skills , leading to a more educated
workfoce
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workforce
.
Therefore
 ,
this
 will lead to a brighter future
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a
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 nation Another key which should be considered is the provision of
free-of-charge
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university
 will be a generous decision of
government
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the government
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 when it comes to the
underprivilleged
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underprivileged
 people . To explain
further
 ,
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those who have talent
which is needed
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that needs
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 to be explored ,
however
 , can not attend
university
course
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courses
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as a result
 of a poor socio-economic background .
This
 means ,
since
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that since
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 the
government
 pursue college without
fee
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fees
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, it will provide poor people an opportunity to not only learn at
university
 but
also
 explore their potential , leading to a better future when they can earn a decent income . In conclusion , the writer undoubtfully
agree
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agrees
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 with the decision of
government
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the government
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waiving
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to waive
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 tuition fees as the result of creating a more educated
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workforce
work force
workfoce
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workforce
 and providing a better future
to
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 one's life
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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