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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that the broadcasting of
products
 is appealing to us, which convinced us to buy a product. While others believe that, promotional camping of
products
 is so regular that now no one pays interest in it anymore. In my opinion,
advertisements
 always charmed
people
 in a unique way, which leads us to buy the product. To some
people
, the announcement of
products
 is influential as it declared its characteristics, benefits, demerits, how to use, why to use and so on,with a musical presentation which keeps us attracted toward the items.
This
 commercial promotion sometime motivates us to buy things and gives us options to choose from many.
For example
, the winter
products
 campaign in the winter season influences us to buy cream, lip balm etc, with the thinking that, they will be more useful than the earlier
products
 we already use.
However
, some individuals feel that because of the repetition of promotional ads,
advertisements
 become monotonous as well as irritating. When we are into a serious cricket match, the billing of
products
 is annoying at that moment which keeps
people
 away from the television.
This
 makes
people
 busy with other work without paying attention to a product camping.
For instance
, most
people
 do household work in our country while a break from
advertisements
 comes in between a movie. In my view, though some lacked interest in advertising, others are into it. The huge market of
advertisements
 with its developed ideas of attracting
people
 proves that the promotion of
products
 works well on mortals. To sum up, considering both points discussed above; the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, advertising influenced
people
 without a doubt, though some tend to ignore
this
 fact.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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