Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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vital part
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better future for any individual. It is suggested by some folks that adolescents should take part
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distinctively
in the
studies
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till the age of 18 years. Considering the fact that
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certainly are not necessarily required for
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those
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who want to excel in careers like arts or sports etc.,
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I disagree with the argument and will explain in detail as perused
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, students should have different
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other
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studies
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,
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by
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compiling
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them for
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will be waste of time and
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for them,
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, one of my friends was interested in
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from his childhood days and he was
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excellent batsman,
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he
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referred
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from school for
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coaching. Currently, he is playing
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at the state level and enjoying his passion.
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, in the contemporary era, everyone including parents
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aware
about
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advantages
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the advantages
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of
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which is evident from the recent survey conducted by one of the prominent agencies that
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the numbers
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numbers
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of school dropouts are declining.
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, people who
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mandatory schools till adulthood
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believe
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that after adulthood they will anyway face other responsibilities including
earn
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earning
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their
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living, so
youngerones
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younger ones
should devote their time to
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up to
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up to
certain age before they
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are inducted
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into professional life.
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,
this
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students who want to excel in
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studies
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their studies
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and not other
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younger ones
who chose
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the non-educational
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field
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.
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, the legendary cricketer Sachin
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Tendulkar
was
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a school
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dropout and played
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from age of 14.
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, compulsory education will deter their progress. In conclusion,
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young people should
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be able
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to decide their career path in consultation with their parents and they should not
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complete
to do full-time
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until and unless it is allowed by their future
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comprehensive education
  • intellectual growth
  • emotional growth
  • social growth
  • evolving job market
  • specialized knowledge
  • extended education
  • reducing inequality
  • essential competencies
  • vocational training
  • economic impact
  • financial constraints
  • infrastructure
  • stress and burnout
  • personal aspirations
  • career aspirations
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