It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?

There is no doubt that a majority of people who had
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to the human race only cared about their goals and did not think
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concept of
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work
and life is crucial for our
health
and our relationships.
Firstly
, it is obvious that the more you
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at the end of the day but
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concentrating
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work
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health
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people who
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without sleeping long
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enough
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enough
to rest.
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professionals who sleep less than 3 hours tend to
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insomnia or depression in comparison with
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people who had healthy sleep routines. The fact that they would not achieve their aims if they got sick should be adequate for them to rest.
Secondly
,
work
-life balance is not only vital for
health
but
also
essential for relationships which is necessary for humans due to humans
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social creatures
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since
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since
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assist us to overcome the
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stress
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we gained from
work
.
However
, most of the couples end up divorced due to the fact that one member of the relationship is
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.
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, they could not spend enough time together.
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building a healthy balance between professional and personal life is so important. To put it simply, even if achieving goals is a great pleasure, it cannot
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without
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balanced. A person who
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to obtain success constantly
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to find a way in terms of body and family
health
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-being
  • Productivity
  • Fulfilling
  • Time management
  • Prioritize
  • Burnout
  • Boundaries
  • Dedication
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Efficiency
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