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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#universities #colleges #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
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It is sometimes argued that higher education content can be delivered through online
courses
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 just as effectively as it can be taught in physical classrooms by teachers.
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 I agree that online learning has many
benefits
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, I believe that physical classes are still very important for college
students
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.
On the other hand
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, online learning has many
benefits
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.
Firstly
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, distance learning often provides
time
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 flexibility.
Students
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 have the freedom to juggle their careers with the school that suits them, rather than wasting
time
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 commuting or trying to fit a busy
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 schedule into a set class
time
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. Most people who choose to
study
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 online can pursue different commitments simultaneously and prefer
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 mode of
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 because it allows them to decide how to allocate their
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 to other life activities.
Secondly
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, distance education can provide
students
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 with a large amount of knowledge. Undergraduate
students
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 have access to online
course
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 materials, including videos, podcasts, and written materials, which help them better understand the
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 theories. Online libraries help people access a variety of information in different fields, including reference materials that meet their professional requirements.
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, despite the above-mentioned
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 of online learning, there are
also
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 many disadvantages. The first one can be distracting. Online
courses
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 allow people to
study
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 anytime and anywhere, making it easy to develop the habit of neglecting and procrastinating
study
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. For many
students
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, a certain number of
courses
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 must be taken to prepare them for
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 completion. Another disadvantage may be a misunderstanding of the theory or concepts of the
course
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. Unlike physical classes, where
students
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 can get answers and interact with questions instantly, in online
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, sometimes tutors or teachers cannot attend to all
students
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due to
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time
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 constraints or schedule differences. In many cases,
courses
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 are not taught in the way
students
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 imagine, and they are left with a lot of questions but ultimately no answers. In conclusion,
although
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 online learning can bring many
benefits
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 to
students
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, especially those with busy schedules or those who want to
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 different
courses
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 at the same
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, physical
courses
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 are still an appropriate learning environment for them to hone their knowledge and experience theoretical concepts.
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supported main points
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introduction conclusion present
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complete response
Address all parts of the task. Although your essay discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of online learning, you need to make your own opinion more clear, as the question specifically asks you to say whether one outweighs the other.
clear comprehensive ideas
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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