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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that nowadays, photographing and filming are extremely powerful means of communication. Albeit these methods are fundamental, I disagree that they are predominating over writing, as writing itself is an ancient and very influential method of communication.
This
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To begin
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 with, image is a universal language. Photos can convey a story
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 their pictures that can never be told
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, people from all over the world can look at the picture and make up their own creative story, feel countless things without having
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 a word.
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 very powerful.
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, movie directors can influence thousands of people with their films and communicate whatever message they have in mind. Apart from that, since we live in a century of rapid technological development, we enjoy
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 of opportunities that the Internet gives us every day. Images are becoming increasingly popular because of
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numerous social
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networks
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. In highlighting, Instagram, Facebook
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, etc
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, heavily rely on pictures
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for
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reason
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reason,
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 more attention has been given to images and videos than ever before.
On the other hand
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, the strength and power of writing can not be denied
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 underestimated. Writers and poets could evoke different feelings and emotions in the
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 and souls of their readers
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 centuries ago.
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,
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books contain the hearts and souls of their writers.
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, those who are fond of reading
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 are said to have creative imagination and
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 understanding of the world.
Furthermore
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, communicating with other people in daily life is almost impossible without writing. In a nutshell,
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 photography and videos have become dramatically popular among
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 population
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, nothing can replace the importance of a written word. No matter how the image impacts humans,
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the written
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 word will always dominate over all other types of communication.

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language
Use short, clear sentences. Fix grammar errors in each paragraph.
structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and stay on it. Do not add too many extra ideas.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple connect words like 'and', 'but', 'for example', 'also'.
content
Give more exact examples. Explain how they show your point.
strength
The essay keeps to the topic and shows a view.
strength
It uses a real world example (social media) to back its point.
strength
There is a clear structure with an intro, body and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visual communication
  • Emotional impact
  • Transcend language barriers
  • Universality
  • Infographic
  • Memory retention
  • Misinterpretation
  • Manipulation
  • Complementary
  • Evocative
  • Multimedia
  • Contextual understanding
  • Ambiguity
  • Visual literacy
  • Instant communication
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