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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today’s generation has become extremely competitive and leaves no stone unturned in terms of getting the best pedestal for them to walk upon. To
this
, some
people
 expound that the
people
 who take upon a
career
 path and stay stuck to it are more likely to prosper, while another school of thought considers that not to be true. I disagree with
this
 lookout of staying glued to
one
’s initial
career
 trajectory and shall propagate my point of view in
this
 regard in the paragraphs to come. The strife to live and survive the sharp-edged pace of the world has become remarkably herculean today. Right from the ground to the sky, almost everyone is seen toiling hard and working their fingers to the bone to manoeuvre better than others.
Hence
 the choices
one
 makes in
one
’s
career
 happen to sculpt the future concerning the decisions
one
 makes during their lifetime and switching and adapting is a cardinal part of it. Gone are the days when
one
 had to stay clung to the domain
one
 had chosen for oneself at the beginning of their
career
. Today is the era of dynamism. Thanks to the pangs of digital contrivances,
one
 can hone their skills and become the best of multiple domains, which zero in on
one
’s discretion and likelihood to the job they do or choose to switch on to. Time and again, it has been how the efficacy of an individual has been rendered lackadaisical owing to
one
’s lost spark for a particular job
one
 is employed for and thereby diminishing the productivity of the organization they are a part of. The cases of
people
 following their passion and making a
career
 switch have not skipped the seams of attention. It keeps
one
 going on the path of accomplishment and instils
one
 with a sense of aligning with their penchant. In
such
 a case it would not at all be factual and pragmatic to believe that
one
 who remains gummed to
one
’s
initially
 chosen
career
 path would be better than those who change it. There have been countless incidents where
one
 has chosen an entirely distinct stream of a
career
 with regards to what
one
 was recruited for during the dawn of
one
’s
career
, and not only has it made
such
people
 materialistically sufficed but
also
 mentally stabilized. Though some might say
one
 has a better chance of promotion when
one
 sticks to
one
’s
career
 stream, that’s not always true, and that too with the expense of going against
one
’s mental inertia.
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