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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

#students #attention #school
As we advance
further
 into the digital age, the importance of studying is undeniable if one wants a good future later in
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life.
While
 learning seems like a straightforward task, many pupils find it challenging to stay
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 in class. Many factors can contribute to
this
 problem, and
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as well as
 suggest a few ideas that could alleviate the issue. One major reason for the inability to concentrate is arguably the involvement of
technologies
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in the course of studying. Nowadays, fewer and fewer schools place heavy restrictions on using smartphones or laptops in class as some methods of teaching actually integrate modern technologies to make studying more engaging and interactive.
While
 using
such
 devices could aid students to a certain extent, they
also
 are a huge source of distraction.
For example
, as we are more connected to the internet than ever before, the need to stay in the loop on social
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 has skyrocketed, and a single notification on our phone from
such
 sites can tempt us away from the current subject at hand for fear of missing out on the latest trends.
Furthermore
, spending too much time staring at a computer screen or
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 phone can often
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 to headaches in some cases, which will undoubtedly hinder one’s ability to pay attention. The solution to
this
 problem is to disconnect ourselves from
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 before engaging in academic activities.
While
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 simple, one needs strong determination and resolve to actually see it through as social
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 can be very addicting. The best way to execute
this
 method is to take small steps to make it more feasible, and finding a middle ground is best as social
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 can sometimes help with our learning endeavours as well. Isolating yourself entirely from these platforms will do more harm than good for they are
also
 a vehicle for sharing information between fellow students and teachers. By reducing time spent online, young learners should see noticeable improvements in their study
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. Learning is often regarded as an arduous task, and the lack of concentration would hinder that task even more. In order to lessen the burden, pupils should not be
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 on their gadgets and only utilize them in moderation if they
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 achieve more in their academic
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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