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Some people think that it is important for children to learn lessons outside the classroom by visiting public buildings. In what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Today some people thoughts that pupils had to learn the thoughts out of the
school
 in public infrastructures like museums and there is a counterpart that does not agree with
this
 latter. In
this
 text I want to explain my point of view,
that is
 I agree with the fact that elementary must go to visit museums, and galleries of arts and take a holiday with students . A large part of people want that their
children
also
 learn outside
school
, the reason is that
children
 must be stimulated by something
that is
 not drawn in a book. I appreciate that they trusted the teachers and escorts that take care of their
children
.
On the other
hand
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 there are several
parents
 that are against
this
 essay because they are too worried about the care of their
children
,
therefore
 they prefer their
children
 stayed at
school
 where in theory are safe from some possible disaster. I understand the preoccupation of all these
parents
, but for ,growth a strong child is necessary that he sees what we did in the past through the museum, gallery of arts and other things like
this
. To sum
up
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 I take the side of
parents
 who agree to permit their
children
 to visit public places, and I advise the
parents
 who don't trust the teacher or the escorts to watch their past and think if when they were a child their remain close in-home home or in
school
 and don't go outside to play with his friends.
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