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One Of Your Friends Recently Had A Birthday Celebration, But You Missed It And You Forgot To Tell Your Friend That You Couldn’t Attend. Write A Letter To Your Friend. In Your Letter: – Explain Why You Missed It – Explain Why You Didn’t Tell Your Friend – And Say What You Would Like To Do To Show That You Are Sorry

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Dear John, Happy
birthday
 to you, and I really hope that you're doing great. I'm writing
this
 message to let you know that I feel sorry for missing you're
birthday
 party
last
 week. It was really out of my hand. As you know, I have to take an important test for me which is the IELTS exam. The test was set on the 6th of April and your
birthday
 party was on the 5th. That's why I was unable to attend and celebrate with you. The reason why I did not tell you that I was not going to come, is that I was very busy studying for the IELTS exam, and I did not have enough time to check my mobile and text you. I'm very excited to tell you that I already booked a dinner table for us tomorrow, in the Sushi store at 9pm. We will celebrate your
birthday
 together and have fun. See you soon. Best wishes, NOUF,
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task achievement
The response addresses all parts of the task (explain why you missed it, why you didn't inform your friend, and what you would like to do to make up for it), but some ideas could be more fully developed for a higher score.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is generally clear, but some awkward phrasing and minor grammatical errors slightly detract from the overall coherence. Try to proofread for small errors, such as 'you're' instead of 'your' and 'the Sushi store' instead of 'a sushi restaurant.'
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to strengthen the logical flow. For example, you could separate the reason for missing the party and the reason for not informing into two distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and suitable for a friendly apology, which fits the task well.
coherence and cohesion
The letter structure includes a proper greeting and closing, making it appropriate for the context.
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