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Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Art
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 is the expression of human creativity and imagination, usually in the form of painting, music, dance and literature. Many
people
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 believe that
art
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 is an integral part of humanity, while some believe that it is just merely a form of entertainment, an escape from the reality of
life
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.
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 essay will discuss both opinions and why
art
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 is a part of and give meaning to
life
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. When we talk about
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, there is
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 certain feeling of joy and appreciation that comes with it. We immediately think about our
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 song,
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 painting, Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet, and even the trending TikTok dance we’ve been trying to learn for the past several days.
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 is the reason why many believe that
art
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 exists mainly for entertainment purposes. Any form of
art
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 gives momentary pleasure to
people
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 that when they are lonesome, they seek happiness by going to a concert
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 or go to a disco bar nearby, or perhaps
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 a ticket to a local museum.
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, there are these
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 who found themselves in the opposing view, who feel that
art
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 has a deep connection to human
life
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. We would often hear
people
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, especially musicians, that their music
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 meaning to their lives, some would even say that
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several times they have been saved by their music. Those who have creative minds, and
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skills find their purpose in
life
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 in their
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. They share their perspective
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 many things in
life
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 through their work, in
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 we even learned a great deal
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 our history and ancient civilization through artworks that have existed for thousands of years, that some
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caves throughout the world.
Art
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 existed for as long as humans existed. It is through
art
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 that many things, like traditions and cultures, have been retained and passed down through generations. We express our emotions through
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, we ease our
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 with it
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. Without a way to tell a story,
human
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the human
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 race would find it difficult to move forward, as the foundation would not have been founded and built. To conclude, while it is true that
art
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 is a reliable source of temporary enjoyment, there is so much more to it than just that, entertainment. It is synonymous
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life
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. It gives
life
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 meaning and purpose.
Art
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 is to
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life
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, as
life
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 is to
art
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. It is the very foundation which the human race is building upon.
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