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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case. Do you think this a positive or negativve situation.

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In some countries, the public prefers to purchase a home rather than rent. since the reason for owning a residence is to be safe
people
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 and don't worry about monthly rent I think it's a positive way of thinking as it will create harmony among
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 and society. in begin, the public prefers to purchase a home to make an independent life. It's a dream for many
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 creates social bonding with the local
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. many
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 spent their savings to buy a sweet plot in their hometown to lead a peaceful growth so they can settle their families into safe apartments and
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 enjoy their daily routines and they don't worried about renting, lease agreements etc.
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 more than 70% of
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 in the UK live in the own
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, purchasing a home and staying in their hometown creates family bonding with relatives and most young
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 want to stay with their childhood friends and they really enjoy staying with their native
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 of moving to other cities. so they try to buy an apartment
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 of renting it to avoid frequent shifting.
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 renting a
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 is cheaper than buying, it keeps you on still moving and breaks the social bonding. for ,example more than 50% of Indian
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 have dreams of buying a
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 before retirement. to conclude, buying a
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 gives a satisfying life to
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 and here kids.
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 believe it gives a better and more comfortable life for the
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