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The advantages brought by the spread of English as a “global language” will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

#spread #english #language”
Nowadays, there are an increasing number of non-native
English
 speakers learning and speaking
English
 in the world. I believe the popularity of
this
language
 is a positive trend,
although
 it may pose a threat to some
less spoken
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language
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. For developing
countries
 that do not speak
English
, learning
English
 is a good way for them to overcome
language
 barriers, thereby gaining advanced knowledge and working experience. There is no doubt that the most advanced information and knowledge
is
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 in some developed
countries
, most of which speak
English
. If someone is interested in
English
, he could study abroad or work in these developed
countries
 to acquire advanced knowledge and technology. One day, when he
go
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 back to his country, he could impart
these information
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 to his students or colleagues. As for developed
countries
 which speak
English
, it is very convenient for them to promote cooperation throughout the world, especially with developing
countries
. In an international setting which encourages people to speak
English
, doing business with local companies and the government is relatively easy. The reason for
this
 is
because
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 encouraging students to learn
English
 in developing
countries
 represents that most of these
countries
 recognize the culture and capability of these
English
-speaking
countries
.
Hence
,
this
 is a good opportunity for them to collaborate with each other and make money together.
On the other hand
, as the spread of
English
 becomes more popular, it may lead to the extinction of some minority languages.
In other words
, it could be regarded as
the
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 cultural invasion of a country.
This
 is because
English
 could help them find better employment or earn more salaries, and they use
English
 to read
English
 newspapers
keeping
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 up with the news and
English
 fashion magazines following fashion. As there are more and more people recognizing
this
 idea
in
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the
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local
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, people would eventually dismiss their native
language
 as a useless tool. In conclusion, publicizing the spread of
English
 has more benefits than its drawbacks,
although
 it may present a challenge to some
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 languages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • cultural exchange
  • economic opportunities
  • educational material
  • scientific research
  • technical documentation
  • innovation
  • knowledge dissemination
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural identity
  • social and economic disparities
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