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A friend has told you that he or she feels lonely in their new city away from their family. Write tu your friend, and Explain why people can feel this way Give some ideas on how tu solve the problem Ask your friend tu contact you and tell you if this works

#friend #city #tu #people #contact #works
Dear xxx, I am so sorry to hear that you are feeling rather isolated in your new home, especially as you have always been
such
 an outgoing person! I think that people tend to feel lonely because they don't have enough opportunities to meet new friends.
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 leads to them staying at home more
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the situation becomes even worse.
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If I
 were you, I would join some of the clubs and societies which exist at your college,
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 the ballroom dancing club - because I know how much you love dancing.
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 means you will meet people with similar interests and abilities, and you can share the enjoyment of ballroom I would
also
 try to use the Internet more, to meet people safely online and see if they are local to you in your new city. You have to be very careful, of course, but if you use Internet sites as they are intended I'm sure you will find some new friends - not necessarily of the romantic type! Please do keep in touch, and let me know how you get on with these suggestions. If you let me know how
this
 goes, I can try to think of other ways to help you in your situation at the moment. Take care and do stay in touch. All the best, yyy
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