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In some areas of the United States, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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There is a prohibition for young
people
that
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not allowed to go out
or
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of
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its
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their
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 houses after a
specifically
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 hour in some cities
of
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 the United States if they are not an adult company. In my opinion, I believe it is not a good option, in
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons why
this
 situation should not continue.
First
 of all, forbidding teenagers to get out of
its
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their
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 homes can have major consequences. Young
people
 are discovering the world,
thus
, they want to learn in their way. When adults encourage the prohibition,
these
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 lead to
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an increase
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increase
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 the distrust between their parents.
For instance
, they will be willing to do more
and
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dangerous activities hiding
to
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from
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 their parents. Another aspect to consider is that
this
 situation affects
to
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the liberty of expression and
decision
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 for the
people
. In the
future
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 it will be difficult to make their own choices and it will affect
its
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their
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 self-esteem.
On the other hand
, maybe
this
 prohibition was made to protect their inhabitants from
dangerous
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,
nevertheless
, it is not a good solution. Facing the
problems
,
such
 as crime rates,
drug
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and drug
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problems
on
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in
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 a city should be enhancing
to
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the population and state.
Therefore
, the government could create a plan and give more attention to these cities, which
needs
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need
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 more help to combat
its
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their
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problems
. To conclude, in spite of the imposition want to their young citizen
stay
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 safe, it is not a good solution. In my opinion, the government should
staying
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stay
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 present in these areas and give solutions to the real
problems
 and not affects the liberty of their young
people
.
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