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Nowadays more and more children are being bought up in single parent families. What are the causes of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this?

#children #parent #families #effects
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affect
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children
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 partner to help due to one divorce or death.
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are
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children
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children
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society
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society
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children
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lack
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children
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parent
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education
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 level ,
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parent
 have to work and still take good care of the
children
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children
.
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children
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parent
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lack
 home training
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parent
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always
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always
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also
children
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released
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raised
with
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parent
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 mostly drop out of school. in conclusion
children
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raised
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single
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parent
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parents
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lack
 of knowledge and
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in
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ability
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the ability
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communication
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