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Some people think every human being can create artworks (e.g. painting), while others think only the people born with the ability can do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.（2015/10/31亚太）

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It is often argued by a few people that every person born on the earth has a particular talent to perform artworks like painting while others have an opinion that humans who gave birth with special abilities can only perform artworks. I would like to cite my opinion on both the audience's aspects
however
, I would agree with the opinion of the
first
 set of audiences because special abilities are not at all needed from the time an individual has given birth to perform the artwork.
Firstly
,many of the audiences should develop these extra activities to relieve stress during their free time. Crowds nowadays are having continuous loads of work due to the busy schedule of every person and are facing severe depression problems and many stress-related issues.To get relief from these problems, it is advised doctors work on their favourite hobby and develop the craft as a routine to minimalise the stress levels in the body.
For instance
, a recent study has shown that people who are spending at least one hour on their hobbies like singing, dancing, cooking etc.. are increasing their life span by seven years more than the society who are continuously doing their desk jobs.
However
,
on the other hand
, few public is born with extra talents wherein they are able to convert their hobby into a career and excel in their life.
For example
, one of the most renowned cricket players and wicketkeeper-batsman Mahendra Singh Dhoni took coaching for wicketkeeping since his childhood and it has been shown in his biopic MS Dhoni-The Untold Story.
This
 is an inspiration to many audiences across the globe to pursue their speciality as a career and develop the skill
Finally
, In conclusion, I would like to conclude by adding that even though few communities are born with exceptional talent, it is not always needed for an individual to develop skills in the field of artwork.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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