Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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it is sometimes thought that the
earth
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is being harmed by human
activities
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other
people
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think that it is a better place to live in which
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human
activities
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think that
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there is no
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of human activity to make the glove habitable. On the one hand, according to some
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the
earth
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is
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unsuitable for human
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due to their
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the most significant reason for holding
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view is
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environment
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pollution
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. Environment
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means the overall
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by polluting air,water,sound and so on. Due to the
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of
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the surroundings
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surroundings
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people
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are being affected by various diseases. These problems are created by
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being
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and
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they are being the victim of
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This
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is not done willingly rather it occurs as the result of some miss uses while
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the emission of harmful gases from factory air is polluted and water
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occurs by
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throwing
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waste materials into the water.
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, according to other
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people
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the
earth
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is
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more suitable to live in
by
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human
activities
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the invention of modern technology has made the life of all
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more
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easier. The way of living has changed a lot compared to that of the past.
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,
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people
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of
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old age lead their life
in
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difficulty
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because there was no electricity but after the invention of it the life of every individual has become very easier.
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, vehicles
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another gift of modern technology. Through
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people
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now can easily travel from one place to another.
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,
mobile
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the mobile
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phone allows us to communicate with other
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whether living in
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area of
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vast
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. To conclude,
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both views are commonly held in our society,
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strongly believe that the
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is
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perfect for living through human
activities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • conservation
  • ecology
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • habitat destruction
  • industrialization
  • pollutants
  • recycling
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • ecosystem
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