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Some people say that the best of improve road safety is to icrease the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic collision has always been one of the major problems in current times. Some people take the view that the minimum legal
age
 to get a
driver
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 license should be increased to upgrade
road
 safety.
This
 essay totally agrees with that statement and will provide arguments to support that opinion.
First
 of all, driving a
car
 or riding a motorbike is not
an
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 easy task as it seems to be, it requires driving skills, awareness of traffic instructions, knowledge about
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vehicles
vehicules
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vehicles
 or motorcycles' maintenance and most of all a sense of
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responsibility
responsablity
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responsibility
, and it is well known that
adolescense
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adolescence
 is a time of recklessness and foolishness, so a
lot
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tennagers
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teenagers
 might not be
responsable
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responsible
 yet,
also
 most of them would not care about
road
 instructions nor checking their automobiles before travelling, all
what
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concern
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 them is the thrill of driving a
car
 and reaching their destination as soon as possible regardless of speed limits.
This
 type of attitude towards driving will lead to
car
 accidents and decreases
road
 safety;
on the other hand
, adults tend to be more mature and reasonable when it comes to driving, they are aware of the importance of
this
 matter and they know it should be taken seriously, that's one of the reasons of why the legal
age
 of getting a driver license should be increased. There is,
in addition
,
further
 point to make, over the
last
 few years, an increasing number of
car
 crashes caused by people under the
age
 of 20 was reported in the news,opinion of the public was divided but some parts of society tend to have a strong opinion about increasing the legal
age
 to get a permit to drive. To conclude,
this
 essay strongly argued that increasing the minimum legal
age
 for driving will be of benefit to
road
 safety.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mature
  • responsible
  • accidents
  • emotional maturity
  • road conditions
  • hazards
  • impulsive behavior
  • risk assessment
  • inexperienced drivers
  • driver education
  • road safety measures
  • driver training programs
  • stricter testing
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • automated driving systems
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