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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #individuals #actions
Some people believe that it is impossible for individuals to tackle environmental problems, while others think
otherwise
, saying for solving these problems everyone should take
actions
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. Both sides will be discussed in
this
 essay and my own opinion is
although
 the action done by every single person may be only slightly contributing, the solution can not be achieved without it.
To begin
 with, it is obvious that solving the problem of pollution is too hard for civics themself. Because what causes
such
 conditions are predominately the industry which is often owned by huge companies. Their power is too strong for the ordinary to challenge,
hence
 little changes could be made if there are only actions from the normal.
For instance
, some villages in developing countries are suffered from the heavy pollution
causied
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caused
 by the factory of
the
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international corporation,
however
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 the demand
of
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 residents is useless for
the
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environmental development.
On the other hand
, the effort of every single person plays a necessary role in it. Without
the
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attention to the environment of people, there could be litter here and there in cities, and environment-friendly technologies could
also
 lose investments, because of the neglect of the public.
That is
 a certain detriment for nature conservation. What is more, if people do not take
actions
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, the government will not enact laws to forbid making pollution, so a final solution could not be seen. In conclusion, it is a must for everyone
taking
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action they can implement to protect our environment, albeit the single force is weak.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • pollution
  • deforestation
  • overwhelming
  • Paris Agreement
  • sustainable practices
  • waste reduction
  • conserving energy
  • market demands
  • awareness campaigns
  • systemic change
  • ripple effect
  • environmental degradation
  • lifestyle choices
  • regulations
  • accountability
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