Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Pepole
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People
have been living on the
earth
for
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of years.
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some
people
believe that the
earth
is being harmed by human workings, other
people
feel that human performances make it is
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to live in . On the one hand,
water
pollution has been a serious issue, which almost all countries have to face.Firstlyman pollutes
water
by throwing waste into it.
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farmers use chemical fertilizers and
insecticide
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in their fields. When
rain
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water
and flood wash away some of these chemicals, they get mixed with
water
in rivers, canals and ponds and pollute
water
. As
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description , according to BBC , in
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2015, large numbers of dead fish were found on the coast
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. The massive fish kill was caused by
water
pollution.
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the
earth
is
being
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more suitable to live in
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human activities.
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the invention of modern technology has made the life of all
people
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easier.
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the
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people
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old age lead their life
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difficulty
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because there was no electricity but after the invention of it
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life of every particular has become very easier. In conclusion , while
people
may vary in their opinions ,
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think that the
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perfect for living through human activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • conservation
  • ecology
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • habitat destruction
  • industrialization
  • pollutants
  • recycling
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • ecosystem
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