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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Nowadays, the crime rate is rising in several
countries
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. Probably the main and easier explanation is that the world
population
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 is exponentially increasing, meaning that the number of criminals is logically keeping pace.
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, at the same time,
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 could be considered a weak presupposition because we do not
born
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 a criminal.
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, what could be the reasons? On the one hand, the suggested
population
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 explanation could be used another way. The increasing number of
people
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 is only widespread in some of the world's areas. The
population
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 in the most developed
countries
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 have stabilized for some decades.
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, it is even decreasing due to a developing lack of births, as is the crime rate.
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, some developing
countries
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, above all China and India, are recording a dramatic increase in
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 rate.
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, in a situation of overpopulation, it is easier to find economic instability, where the risk of emerging criminality is high.
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, another reason could be the weakening religious sentiment spreading worldwide, especially in the north-western
countries
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. Without moral restraints,
people
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 could become dangerous to society.
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, the
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people
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's progressing alienation feelings. Social media feed
people
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's anger and envy by forcing them to see some beautiful, dreamy, and fancy stars' life. In conclusion,
people
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's anger leading to crimes cannot be extinguished without societal change, which is almost impossible.
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, nothing prevents society from trying to prevent crimes by helping
people
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 keen to commit them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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