Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illness or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In recent times, psychological illnesses have shown exponential growth in our society. They may not be directly visible
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but are as damaging as any other disablement. Over a period of time,
people
with physical disabilities have still found acceptance,
however
,
this
is not the case with
someone
who
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psychological disabilities.
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essay will establish that
people
with mental
illness
are being discriminated at
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and personal
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. The most obvious challenge for
people
with psychological
illness
is
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of professional work life.
Although
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both government and private sector is promoting employment for
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, it is limited to physical ones only.
For instance
,
people
with Autism, a psychological disorder, can do lots of normal and creative activities, but nobody prefers to give them a job. Clearly, our society is still not able to understand and accept
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psychological disorders.
On the other hand
, similar challenges are there in the personal lives of these
people
. It is
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sight to see
someone
with some mental
illness
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have a social group.
Moreover
, it has been observed that even
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relatives and the family member do not
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. If
someone
,
for example
, is suffering from depression,
instead
of helping him,
people
further
leave him alone. All these dynamics on
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front make the situation even worse for
someone
who is already undergoing some mental condition. In conclusion,
people
with disabilities, whether physical or psychological, are very much
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of our society. Though
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many initiatives are there to support them and enable them to lead a normal life,
people
with mental
illness
are still struggling to find acceptance
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workplace
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as well as in their personal circle.
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