Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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currently. There is much debate over whether money should be spent on better
computers
or
teachers
for
education
.
Although
,
latest
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model
computers
assistant
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to increase
success
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the success
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rate, ı strongly believe that
teachers
are more significant than
the
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other thing
such
as
computer
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computers
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because
beacuse
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because
almost every pupil takes their
teachers
as a role-model. Some people
believes
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that
computers
worth spend more money
because
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on because
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they think,
ıt
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it
helps to increase the success rate.
For example
, there is a
computer
lab which is new redevelopment in my high
school
. In the category of researching and making scientific improvements, my
school
outraced the other schools which have not sufficient
computer
resources.
In addition
,
students
can enhance their
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skills
such
as coding. It helps
to
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children in thinking more
comprehensive
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.
Therefore
, the chance of being successful is increasing thanks to better
computers
.
However
, one of the most famous
person
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people
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,which is interested in
pedegogy
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pedagogy
, Fatma Kal
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n, says
teachers
have the most control over the
students
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student's
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success after their families. Others,
on the other hand
, argue that
teachers
are more important because
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students
stuudents
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students
take them
a
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as
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role-model
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role model
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.
Students
especially
who
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those who
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are in high
school
, are in the development of their character period.
Thus
, they try to
resemle
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resemble
their
teachers
willingly or unwillingly.
For example
, when ı was in high
school
, ı had a teacher and ı started to act like him at the end of the
school
according to my
friends
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friend's
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feedbacks
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. I agree with
this
argument since if ı took role-model
a
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not
adequate
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an adequate
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person to look alike,
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it
would be very disadvantageous for my future. In conclusion, some people argue
that
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whether
computers
or
teachers
are more vital for
students
'
education
life.
Better
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computer
is not important
as
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for
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teachers
in
education
because
education
is not about academic achievement.
Hence
, I strongly believe that
teachers
are more contributing
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students
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student's
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education
because
students
determine their behaviours according to their
teachers
.
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