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Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #money #education #computers #teachers
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In today's world, parents are facing
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 currently. There is much debate over whether money should be spent on better
computers
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 or
teachers
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 for
education
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.
Although
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,
latest
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the latest
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 model
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assistant
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 to increase
success
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the success
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 rate, ı strongly believe that
teachers
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 are more significant than
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other thing
such
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computer
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computers
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because
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because
 almost every pupil takes their
teachers
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 as a role-model. Some people
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 that
computers
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 worth spend more money
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 they think,
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it
 helps to increase the success rate.
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, there is a
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 lab which is new redevelopment in my high
school
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. In the category of researching and making scientific improvements, my
school
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 outraced the other schools which have not sufficient
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 resources.
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,
students
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 can enhance their
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skills
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 as coding. It helps
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children in thinking more
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.
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, the chance of being successful is increasing thanks to better
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.
However
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, one of the most famous
person
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people
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,which is interested in
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pedagogy
, Fatma Kal
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n, says
teachers
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 have the most control over the
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students
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student's
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 success after their families. Others,
on the other hand
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, argue that
teachers
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 are more important because
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students
stuudents
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students
 take them
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role-model
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role model
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.
Students
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 especially
who
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those who
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 are in high
school
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, are in the development of their character period.
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, they try to
resemle
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resemble
 their
teachers
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 willingly or unwillingly.
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, when ı was in high
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, ı had a teacher and ı started to act like him at the end of the
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friends
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friend's
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feedbacks
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. I agree with
this
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 argument since if ı took role-model
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not
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an adequate
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 person to look alike,
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it
 would be very disadvantageous for my future. In conclusion, some people argue
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whether
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 or
teachers
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 are more vital for
students
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'
education
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 life.
Better
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 is not important
as
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for
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teachers
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 in
education
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 because
education
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 is not about academic achievement.
Hence
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, I strongly believe that
teachers
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 are more contributing
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students
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student's
students'
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education
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 because
students
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 determine their behaviours according to their
teachers
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.
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