Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today's world, parents are facing a dilemma currently. There is much debate over whether money should be spent on better worth
computers
or teachers
for education
. Although
, the latest model computers
assist to increase
the success rate, ı strongly believe that Change preposition
in increasing
teachers
are more significant than other thing
Change the wording
another thing
other things
such
as computers
because almost every pupil takes their teachers
as a role-model
. Some people believe that Correct your spelling
role model
computers
Add a missing verb
are
spend
more money on because they think, it helps to increase the success rate. Wrong verb form
spending
For example
, there is a computer lab which is new
redevelopment in my high Correct article usage
a new
school
. In the category of researching and making scientific improvements, my school
outraced the other schools which have not sufficient computer resources. In addition
, students
can enhance their skills such
as coding. It helps children in thinking
more comprehensively . Wrong verb form
think
Therefore
, the chance of being successful is increasing thanks to better computers
. However
, one of the most famous person ,which is interested in pedagogy , Fatma Kal ı n, says teachers
have the most control over the students
' success after their families. Others, on the other hand
, argue that teachers
are more important because students
take them as role model
. Fix the agreement mistake
models
Students
especially those who are in high school
, are in the development of their character period. Thus
, they try to resemble their teachers
willingly or unwillingly. For example
, when ı was in high school
, ı had a teacher and ı started to act like him at the end
of the school
according to
my friends' feedback . I agree with this
argument since if ı took role-model as a
not an adequate person to look alike, it would be very disadvantageous for my future. In conclusion, some people argue whether Correct article usage
apply
computers
or teachers
are more vital for students
' education
life. The
better computer is not important for Correct article usage
A
teachers
in education
because education
is not about academic achievement. Hence
, I strongly believe that teachers
are more contributing to the student's education
because students
determine their behaviours according to
their teachers
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