Some people believe that famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People
have different views about whether celebrities
play a positive role in helping to raise the awareness of the public towards international aid issues. In my opinion, famous figures do attract people
's attention
, but to some extent
they can be seen as a distraction and make individuals focus on them rather than on the Add aย comma
,extent
problems
themselves.
Celebrities
can undoubtedly draw people
's attention
for a variety of reasons. Firstly
, famous people
have a large number of fans who are crazy about them and these followers would tend to imitate the behaviour of idols
. For example
, Yao Ming, a sports icon in China, dedicated himself to charity and wildlife conservation and asked the public to help those in need, therefore
a lot of his fans were aware of the problems
and donated their money to charity as well. Secondly
, celebrities
are more influential in comparison with average people
and they have the opportunities to speak in front of the public media. This
means that their actions and support can be seen as an advertising campaign, which can draw people
's attention
.
However
, sometimes people
may just focus on their idols
and have no idea about what the real problems
are. Some followers of superstars are easily influenced and affected by their idols
. They lack the ability to think critically and follow their idols
' instructions without any hesitation. In this
case, they are actually paying attention
to the celebrities
rather than to the problems
. This
may lead to a detrimental impact and make the situation even worse.
In conclusion, while the support by celebrities
towards international problems
can attract people
's attention
, some of their followers are in fact caring about their idols
and this
could make the problems
less important.Submitted by tincel on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
