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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the words, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reason and examples from your own knowledge and experience?

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In the
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 across the globe. It,
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, becomes necessary for individuals to tackle multiple problems.
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, I will explain why it has caused a plethora of issues in the recent past. While it might seem impossible to prevent
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, it is not entirely impossible.
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, humans should incorporate renewable sources of energy in their daily activities.
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, if mankind depends on solar power for power generation rather than chopping trees to burn wood, there will certainly be a substantial decrease in
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.
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, the growth of the population needs to be controlled. There is not enough space to accommodate the ever-increasing population.
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 inevitably gives rise to the incarnation of concrete jungles thereby occupying forest land.
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, clearly, has never been a good idea for many reasons. Primarily, it had an adverse effect not only on wildlife but
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 on aquatic birds and sea creatures.
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, a certain species of a particular tiger has been endangered.
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, the agricultural sector witnessed a reduction in food sources
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 as crops.
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, trees help in absorbing carbon dioxide.
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, these gases cause various ailments among humans. I have personally seen individuals suffering from lung cancer and asthma during the
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 decade. I believe the root cause is nothing else but
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. To sum up, citizens should strive to be cautious about
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. If the aforementioned solutions are put into practice, there will be an opportunity to restore the forest. We should be aware of the consequences of it through retrospection and reflection.
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