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Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly argued that despite the increase in the number of
people
 reading online
news
, the most essential source of
news
 will still be
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 for most
people
. Personally, I would argue
this
 idea as
newspaper
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 will be the main source of
new
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;
however
, producing too many papers can lead to several drawbacks on trees. There are compelling reasons
as to
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why traditional newspapers will still be used by a big number of
people
 regarding the easy way
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it
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 and the low expenditure. Regarding the former, most old
people
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using modern devices,
therefore
,
news
 on paper is easier for them to reach. In fact,
the
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printed texts
on
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newspaper
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 can be read
through
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 long hours without any harm to
human 's
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 eyes. With respect to the latter,
people
 just have to pay a small fee
on
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 each
newspaper
 which will not cost you dollars to buy a device for reading.
For example
, in Vietnam, with 0.5$ you can easily buy those and have access to the newest
news
.
However
, I am
also
 convinced that
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the massive production of traditional
newspaper
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 will lead to
positives
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 outcomes. One of them is the excessive in
tree
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 cut down will happen if papers are needed. In fact, nowadays, more and more trees have been used to make papers,
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people
 get
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 to reading
news
 on the Internet, natural resources can be saved. In conclusion, why there
are
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justification
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 for the
news
on
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 newspapers is still the major choice of
people
although
 they can read these on the Internet, I would contend that the negative consequences are more prominent.
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