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The pictures describe the alternations that took place in Willington town between 1780, 1860 and 2000. Overall, the most noticeable change was the removal of all agriculture and woodlands.
Additionally
, the town had become more residential with rising amenities. Looking
firstly
 at the west of the maps, there was a river running from the northwest of Willington to the southwest. In1860, a bridge was constructed across the middle of the river and a road was opened near the bridge to the north, leading to a village in the east.
Moreover
, a wetland for birds was built at the south end of the water flow in 2000. The farming area in the middle of the town from 1780 was halved in size by 1860 and completely removed by 2000. A row of shops was established, lining the eastern river bank. Turning to the east of Willington, the village in the northeast contained 100 homes in 1780, which increased in number to 200 in 1860 and reached 500 homes in 2000. The woods in the southeast saw a decline over the years and was demolished entirely by 2000, giving space for new amenities including schools and sports fields. A road was constructed to provide accessibility from the housing area to these new amenities.
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