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Some students take one year off between school and university. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Many Young
people
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 do not tend to go to
University
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 directly after graduating from
school
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. There are different ideas about it. while there are some disadvantages I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. A gap
year
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 between
school
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 and
university
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 could be beneficial for youngsters. many young
people
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 work over
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 period.
Firstly
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, these
people
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 could work and save some money
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 they can pay
university
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 fees independently.
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, there are many keen
students
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 who are not able to pay
university
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 expenses, but they usually work a
year
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 before
university
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 and save some money for the upcoming Academy years.
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, many of these young
people
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 find out they are interested in working and do not waste their time studying for higher degrees.
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 to that, most youngsters do not have much free time during Schools time due to their busy timetable but after graduation, they get a chance to travel somewhere near or to a far-off destination To widen their horizons and get many experiences or become familiar with new cultures. there may be several disadvantages related to the gap
year
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 one of the major drawbacks is that transition back to
school
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 could be more difficult. these
students
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 are already in the
school
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 mode of life taking a
year
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 off can make it difficult to get back into the swing of things.
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, youngsters may feel behind their peers as many of them compare themselves with other
students
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 could have detrimental consequences in their future. in way of conclusion, some
students
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 prefer to have a
year
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 off for different purposes like working and
traveling
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 which are beneficial, but
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this
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 gap
year
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 could have some drawbacks which they might consider about them.

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