Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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It is argued that marketing
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through media provokes people to purchase unnecessary items, while a few others believe that, it is vital for the material information to be shared for the knowledge of the public in order for them to make the appropriate decisions. I agree with the latter, and
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. On the one hand, almost all items are brought to the public knowledge
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, through the media of which, television advertising is the most convenient, as it is backed up with celebrities most of the time.
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to say, brand ambassadors are chosen for every product, and
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are purchased by their well-wishers even though the element may not be of any significance to the buyer.
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, the
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and tone of multimedia advertisements are attractive
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that children get attracted to them quite quickly, of which Chocolates are an example.
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, advertisements help to increase
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public awareness of new
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advantages and users can compare their prices to the existing
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being used.
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, when a new product is introduced to the market, the items will be able to get the public attention through media.
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, in the past, women used to buy rice and grind it to get rice flour.
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, recently, the introduction of ready-made rice flour has saved not only the time and efforts of the ladies in the Kitchen
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but
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reduced the cost of buying the raw materials and
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cost of grinding it. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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some
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marketed do not have significance in our daily lives, I believe a vast majority
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and will help the users to choose the right product.
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