Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

The rate at which
students
have so many obstacles in their academic performance has become a global concern.
This
essay will be discussing both the reason and the solution to
this
problem. One major barrier affecting
students
in
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is finance,most
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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undergo
this
problem especially those from any average family ,so in
school
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they have to struggle to survive and make the necessary payments
such
as
school
fees, hostel fees, feeding,hall dues etc which can bring distraction to their studies. In
this
case, the
school
should have a good welfare system that can provide
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work
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study scheme that can enable
students
to work and study at their convenience.
Additionally
,cultism and bad friends have become another issue which can play
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role in student academic. Nowadays,
undergraduat
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undergraduate
undergraduates
are being forced by colleagues to join
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gang
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and involved in activities like drinking alcohol,smoking and fornicating,thereby neglecting the main reason why they are in
school
.
For instance
, a student sent to university to study nursing, on arrival,he began to see how powerful some people are,how others make money and party, if he is not someone from proper home training, he will want to be like them and start seeking advice from them and
this
can cause bad impact on his academic. In
such
cases , parents have an important role to play, they should always advise their children about
such
friends and teach them how to be contented.
Lastly
, case of incompetent lecturers or teachers, there is a saying that not everyone is born to teach. If there is a teacher
that is
not reliable and competent,
this
can may it difficult for
students
to pay attention especially when they don't understand what they are being taught. The institution should do a proper background check and get information about their experience and teaching capabilities before employing them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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