Some argue that patriotism is the primary cause of wars globally. Others feel that it serves to prevent less ethical politicians from running a country and starting wars.

Some
people
proclaim that
nationalism
is the main driver of wars around the world. Others believe it serves as a safeguard against less moral
politicians
taking power and inciting conflict. It is agreed that
nationalism
this
a political direction aimed at improving your
state
.
This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, there
are
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nothing wrong
of
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being
patriotic
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person.
Such
people
always concentrate on improving their
country
, and definitely not on
the
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beginning wars, because they know that it will destroy their
country
on
economic
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and political
level
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.
For instance
, Ukrainian president Vladimir Zelensky, who was an ordinary citizen living in his
country
and working as an actor, became an excellent example of what should true patriots be like. He started his presidential campaign and received huge support from
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was
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concentrated on strengthening the
state
and improving life for Ukrainians and
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never
been
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interested in others states.
On the other hand
, some
politicians
become so obsessed with
nationalism
ideas
so
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they even could start wars in order to prove to everyone that their nation
are
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the best one.
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,
recent
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war that was started by
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russia
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federation could be a nice example of
unhealthy
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understanding of
nationalism
. It is proven by the fact , that one of the
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to
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ending
war
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was denazification from
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russia
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side. Attempts to destroy the Ukrainian nationality ,reasoned by their own security, invokes
feeling
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the feeling
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that
Russia
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politicians
become so obsessed with their own
country
so
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they decide that they can do whatever they want. It is a
really
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live example of which consequence could cause by too patriotic
people
.
Furthermore
,
Russia
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authorities done the biggest mistake that will destroy their
economic
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and their
state
completely
that
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contrary to the concept of
nationalism
. To summarise, patriotic
people
should
should
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be interested
only
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improvement
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and definitely not in
destroying
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.
Therefore
, patriotic
people
could positively
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on
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their
state
and they shouldn’t forget about what true
nationalism
is. After a thorough analysis of
this
subject, it is predicted that all
politicians
will use
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of
nationalism
for powerful improvements in their countries and not for destroying others.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nationalism
  • xenophobia
  • aggressive policies
  • accountability
  • diplomacy
  • national unity
  • ethical political leadership
  • extreme patriotism
  • patriotic sentiment
  • diplomatic solutions
  • internal conflicts
  • external conflicts
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