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Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Crime
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 is a major concern for any country or state. Especially in India, the rates are extremely high. There are many kinds of
crimes
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 which have taken place to date and which have caused so much trouble and pain to the public.
Crimes
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 are something which can be prevented with utmost care and caution. There are some
people
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 who think corruption can be prevented with a lot of
actions
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 taken and few believe that lesser
actions
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 are enough. In the coming ,paragraphs we will get an idea of both opinions.
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 of all
crimes
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 in
places
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 where there is carelessness by the
people
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.
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, robbers find it easy to rob when the person is not aware and careless about his belongings.
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, other kinds of
crimes
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also
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 happen because of
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 reason. There are certain
crimes
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 which are inevitable and cannot be assumed by us that it is going to happen
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 as killing or murdering a person. These
crime
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 rates are very high these days
nonetheless
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 of the precautions taken by the
people
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. A high amount of action should be taken against
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crimes
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 to reduce the
crime
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 rate, it requires a lot of
actions
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such
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 as installing cameras in public
places
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, weapon detection machines , increasing the number of security systems and many more
actions
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 can be taken to stop or prevent the
crime
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 from happening. While some of them feel fewer
actions
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 have to be taken, that only increases the number of
crimes
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 happening due to a lack of security and necessary
actions
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 not being taken.
This
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 will only affect the number of
people
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 being prone to
crimes
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 and losing their lives and belongings. Less amount of
actions
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 can be taken in
places
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 where there are fewer chances of
crimes
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 taking place.
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, we can conclude by saying that it is necessary to take a lot of
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 to prevent
crimes
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 to help
people
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 live their lives peacefully and to live a life in which they don’t have to worry about
crimes
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 taking
places
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