Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that

children

should watch

TV

not only at

home

,

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but

also

in

school

, because, for them, watching

TV

is more efficient for some

children

in terms of learning. I completely disagree with

this

idea, because it can be more effective to learn from

teachers

in

school

and by watching

TV

at

home

equally,

also

watching it so much can be harmful

for

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their eyes.

First

of all, obviously watching

TV

is very helpful for some

children

who want to learn something, but the combination of learning from

teachers

in

school

and

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watching

TV

at

home

could be more beneficial. Despite the fact that

children

learn faster visually, they are not able to ask TVs question, but

teachers

.

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For example

, after learning a new lesson at

school

,

children

can improve their knowledge

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that lesson by watching something related to that on

TV

at

home

,

then

if there are any unclear points, they can ask their

teachers

in the following days.

In addition

, if

children

were encouraged to watch

TV

both in

schools

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and at

home

, it would lead them to spend too much time in front of

screen

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.

As a result

, they would face health problems

such

as weakness in their eyes(?). The rate of

children

who have issues in their eyes

have

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been increasing for the

last

decades, as the usage of TVs

rise

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up.

Therefore

, it could be

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to less

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time as much as possible which is spent

by

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watching

TV

. To conclude, though watching

TV

is effective for some

children

for learning, it would be better to use it only at

home

, because it reduces the time

children

spend in front of

screen

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, and help them to take advantage of both

teachers

and

TV

.