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Band 3

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Assumption
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The assumption
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 is that everyone wishes have
assets
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the assets
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 of other people,
the
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and the
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 majority of society tend to
thinks
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think
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like
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thislike
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. But
on the other hand
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, somebody
exist
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exists
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 who
don’t
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doesn’t
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 live as mentioned.
Main
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of
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apply
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to be satisfied
what
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with what
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 you have is to know what are your demands in life. If a person
recognise
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recognises
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 himself or herself
then
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 that human can be pleased with him or her wealth
otherwise
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 humankind always has to complain about their status. According to me,
our
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the
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 things
what
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that
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 we already have can change. We must alter and work so much
for
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to
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increase
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increasing
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 our wealth, abilities or possibilities.
Best
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The best
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 way to could explain myself is
giving
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by giving
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 instances
for
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of
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 that situation.
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,
a
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apply
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someone who grievance about affairs every time. People like
this
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 never fix anything in their lifetime but determined individuals can change their destiny by working so much. It is
also
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 well known that to desire something more isn’t a bad mood because it’s
a
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the
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 origin of
way
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the way
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 to going success. Achievement
come
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comes
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 with
passion
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a passion
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 due to being fulfilled
cause
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causes
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to
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of
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 laziness. To be satisfied with owned things does not get dedication and without
excitement
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,excitement
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 anybody can’t be perfect.
To
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In
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 conclusion, not only being fussy constantly isn’t
great
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a great
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 lifestyle but
also
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to be
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being
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 pleased
against
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in
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 every case isn’t beneficial for achieves of humanity.
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