You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some places, old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

In certain parts of the
world
, elderly
people
are valued more , while in some other
countries
importance is given to young
people
.
This
is due to various reasons and
this
essay will discuss both of these views and offers an opinion.
First
off, elderly
people
tend
influence
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or direct the
countries
based on the
country
's
value
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values
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and traditions.
Countries
like Japan value old age
people
more as they have made a dramatic change in the
country
's economy after the
second
world
war. Many elderly
people
followed traditional methods of running businesses and expanded them across the
world
.
Further
western
countries
visited Japan to learn about their traditional production methods and lifestyle etc.
Moreover
, old age
people
tend to be more inclusive and make calm and composed decisions and these may benefit everyone in the
country
or region. Due to their past experience, they are more capable of handling difficult situations.
On the other hand
, youths dominate the developed
countries
as they are the key reasons for
the
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faster economic growth and
technology
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developments.
Countries
like India and China are called economic
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powerhouses
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power houses
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powerhouses
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due to their large young population. They are the major reason for
surge
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economic
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growth in their
countries
, where the
countries
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gross domestic products have grown exponentially over the years. Since
majority
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the majority
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of the workforce in these
countries
are youths, they offer many skills to the industries in the region.
Moreover
, youth are able to bring new technologies to the
world
.
This
may automate tasks and reduce
cost
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the cost
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of production in the industries. In my opinion, youth should be given more priority as they help to improve the
country
's economy and bring optimal results to corporations by introducing
latest
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technologies.
This
may help to eliminate traditional manual
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workloads
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work loads
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workloads
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.
People
should take care of elderly
people
by providing essential needs but involving elderly
people
in
decision making
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decision-making
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should be reduced as they are
resistance
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resistant
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to change and may affect the growth of the
country
.
Further
,
countries
like Japan
has
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higher
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a higher
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number
numer
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number
of older
people
and they are
struggling
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compete with other
countries
since they don't have sufficient young human capital.
Therefore
,
its
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necessary to give more priority to
the
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young
people
. In conclusion,
the
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young
people
influence the
world
more than
the
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older
people
by offering benefits to
countries
by improving the economy and the lifestyle of
people
, elderly
people
tend to resist
for
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change and do not cope up with the
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fast-moving
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fast moving
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fast-moving
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world
.
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