In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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the owner of a

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appartment

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in some nations.

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behind it, as well as the consequence of the stream. In my view, having own

home

is a great essential step taken by a man

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toward

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his family and himself. To some

people

, owning a

house

refers many things

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fulfilling

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, designing personal space with imagination and requirements, settling down in a place for peace, etc. It provides the feeling of safety and security, without paying attention

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rent

. Every month a huge amount of money

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landlord

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, which

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the

people

under pressure who live

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rental

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house

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, Inenesning

house

rent

imposed by the

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owner to the tenants became a burden day by day,

moreover

people

are

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forbidden

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strictly from doing any change inside

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sometime

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irritating who living in the

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house

rent

shows that

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house

charge

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increased

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% from 2015-2017,which have a negative effect on the

people

who hire

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house

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and motivated them to

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for themselves. If

people

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then

staying on

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, it will

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benefits

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benefits

than

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demerits

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of all, individuals

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more careful

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place they have

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came

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of a rental

house

. They may not damage anything like walls,

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glasses

of windows, swages site, kitchen etc, as it is their own property, which damage would cost themselves.

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drawback

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also

such

as,

people

may stuck in a city while it may demand shifting to another town for job or study

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Sometime

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may face security and

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maintenance

maintainance

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maintenance

problems which may

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charge

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. Though there are disadvantages,

positive

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sides of buying an

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apartment

apparent

appartment

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apartment

overweight the negative sides. To conclude, considering

the

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both points discussed above, the most logical conclusion to be drawn is that, possessing a

home

or an

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apartment

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far better than staying on

rent

. In my opinion,

people

feel much

comfortable

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in private property rather than charging a

house

for themselves. It gives

people

feeling

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a feeling

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of security and they feel rooted

themselves

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
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belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
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