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In some countries an increasing number of people are sufferimg from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree pr disagree with this opinion?

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It is incontrovertible that most people appreciate eating fast
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, but they do not take it as a habit.
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, some folks seem to abuse it and ,
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, they begin to suffer from health problems. For
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 kind of
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. In my view, a higher tax is an efficient measure to adopt to prevent people from eating too much fast
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. In fact, I believe that a greater cost would reduce the number of fast
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 consumers.
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, I doubt that
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 political decision would be enough by itself. It is evident that the main advantage of fast
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 is its cheapness.
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, I am not sure that a higher tax would lead to a relevant decrease in consumers.
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, I strongly believe that some friends of mine would not mind paying a couple of euros more for a hot dog or a kebab, and neither would I.
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 because fast
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 would still be cheaper than a regular meal. So, in my opinion, there is something more that should be done by governments.
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, in order to discourage fast
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 consumption, I think that a lower tax should be imposed on healthy
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, which is way too much expensive nowadays.
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, governments should promote campaigns among the citizens to inform them about the diseases that can be caused by
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. In conclusion, I cannot affirm that I totally agree with
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 opinion. It surely is a good start, but it is a measure that should come with other ones: only a combination of decisions would lead to a fall in fast
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 consumption.

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