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Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources such as forests animals or clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples your support your opinion.

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In the contemporary era, there are so many natural gifts for living better. like
water
. It is common knowledge that most of the earth is covered by
water
. while a human has faced with a scarcity of drinking
water
.
This
 essay will argue the grounds why it is important to pay attention to lack of the
water
.
Water
 is a vital liquid all around the world. Because not only all animals and plants are alive by
water
 but
also
 most of our bodies consist of
water
. Considering that 97percent of earth's
water
 is salty so there is just 3
percent
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per cent
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 of sweet drinks left over. In most countries especially developing and developing countries
water
 consumption is the wrong way and most of the clean
water
 is wasted. Based on recent reports published by Arizona university 60
percent
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per cent
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 of countries will definitely face a
water
 crisis in 2080. Due to the population explosion, it would be no drop
of
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in
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 clean
water
 in the future. That means, there will be no
water
 to drink and crop cultivation.
Hence
, without agricultural production, it might be no animal husbandry
consequently
, no meat or dairy, and no vegetables for people's needs. It is unbelievable being alive without any food or
water
. In conclusion, in view of the arguments outlined above, it can conclude that people must be informed
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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