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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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 countries are trying to indulge themselves
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 knowing the
history
 of the houses that they live in or the cultural heritage of their king or queen’s mansion. I agree with the given statement that more
people
 are interested in knowing about the
history
 of the periodical constructions, which are either made for them or
rulers
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 of that kingdom. The main reason behind
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 surge
for
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this
 culture is because of
people
 are started to know about the places that they live in, either
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 time that they had or through discussions with friends. Due to
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, whatever the root cause,
people
 are researching
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online or offline.
In
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 one hand, it is a lot easier for them to know about the
buildings
 that live
,
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 because usually
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buildings
 are constructed anywhere between 50-100 years out some of which dates back to more than that, but we can ask our grandparents who were living now about the
history
 of the building, how it was constructed, who made it, old
people
 are more interested in telling the story while having
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lunch or a dinner.
On the other hand
, when it comes to larger
buildings
 of the kings
in
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area
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,
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people
 like to know through online research and if possible, have a visit themselves like a vocation.
For example
; more
people
 are visiting the British palace, some say that it generates around 500 million pounds in revenue just by visits alone. If you take that into consideration
then
 we can see the scale of which
people
 are inkling towards
this
 particular culture. In conclusion,
people
 are knowing about
the
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buildings
 and their
history
 in
few
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 countries, either through online or offline research, mainly because of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 which makes
people
 curious about knowing about life and
history
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the history
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 of what they had in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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