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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Learning a new
language
 can be beneficial to all people around the world. Some are of the opinion
the
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 living in a country
which
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in which
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one
 does not know its
language
 can hinder your goal in different ways and prevent your improvements. I entirely agree with
this
 point and will attempt to explain my reasons properly. The most obvious reason is that
one
 can not work and support himself financially as most
of
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the
employments
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require
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one
 to know at least the basic level of the
language
. If
one
 does not have enough understanding of it,
will
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one will
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 not understand his work’s structures, which
result
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results
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 in some major problems with
co-workers
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coworkers
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 and other staff.
For example
, imagine working in a restaurant as a waiter, if take
costumers’
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customers’
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 orders wrongly, a great mass may arise.
Therefore
, even for basic jobs,
one
 should know a little bit of the
language
.
Furthermore
, if
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one’
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one's
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 intention is to study abroad, he should comprehend the academic
language
in
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 an excellent and fluent rate. If he does not perceive the lectures and speeches
holding
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 in classes, were not able to follow the topic and
consequently
 will fail the subjects at final exams.
Finally
,
one
 of the more apparent impacts would be on social
life
.
Although
one
 may make his point
by
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 body
language
 in some cases, it could misinterpret and bring about critical issues. In order to socialize and communicate with other people he should know their mother tongue. To sum up, not knowing the
language
 of
a
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 nation in
where
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which
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one
 lives, will cause so many difficulties in different categories
such
 as work
life
, school
life
 and social
life
. There is no doubt that learning a foreign
language
 in order to live in that country is a necessity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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