At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with number of older people. Do the advantage of this situsation outweigh the advantage?

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this
time young
people
are
most
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important weapon for a
country
. Numerous
country
population
with relatively a little
number
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numbers
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of older
people
than
large
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a large
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number
of young adults. In
this
essay
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I will examine the advantage of
large
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a large
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number
of young
people
more than
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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.
Firstly
, the juvenile of a
country
is
significant
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a significant
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fact
of
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fastest
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the fastest
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growing economical situation.
Youth
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generation
have
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ability
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the ability
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of stunning leadership quality
for
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emphasis
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a
country
to
fastest
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world more than senior citizens.
For instance
,
the
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young
people
have knowledge about deep and modern technology to use them perfectly and precisely,
also
they can get output from
these technology
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very positively.
However
,
the
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modern
people
can run a
country
to
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forward very exquisitely
for
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getting the highest destination of
technological
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the technological
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era, whereas older
people
are less compatible
gor
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for
or
this
pioneer. When a government has
great
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number
of youth
people
,
then
the
country
can use them as a booster of
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their
thier
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their
development.
On the other hand
, it can be explicit that the various
number
of young adults generation is more innovative than
older
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the older
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population
. They can manage every critical
circumstances
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by new
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eye catching
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solution
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solutions
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with
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their
thier
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their
innovative step.
For example
, the innovation of substantial plastic polythene in Bangladesh,
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is actually made
by
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jute and
it
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is incredibly
environmental
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friendly. The huge
number
of adolescent
peoples
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peoples'
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advantage is they are
pole
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a pole
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of globalisation
such
as
big
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number
of adapt
population
in China. If a
country
can make sure
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of a
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a
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intelligent young generation
then
the
country
will
be
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a
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flourish
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country
within
next
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one or two decades.
In
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concussion
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, have
huge
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the huge
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advantage
of
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over
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young
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the young
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population
in a
country
whereas
older
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the older
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population
is less significant to grow the
country
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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