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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle this problem?

#world #measures #governments #individuals
It must be admitted that our planet faces many major issues. One of the most noticeable problems is global warming. Here we will see some of its causes and
also
 what can the government and individuals do to ameliorate its damaging effects. Global warming is usually connected to gas emissions. the more gas emissions from factories and human activities are produced the more our world soccer from increasing its temperature. As industrial sector consumes huge amounts of fissile fuels leading to the release of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which is the main cause of global warming.
In addition
 to transportation
such
 as aeroplanes, cars and ships
also
 help exacerbate
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to amount in the air. To solve
this
 problem, the government and the people should work together.
For instance
, authorities should increase awareness of the importance of maintaining a balanced atmosphere and how our actions can result in crucial consequences. That can be done by involving information about global warming and schools' curricula. Advertising could
also
 be a benefit in changing individuals' behaviour. The government could improve transport infrastructure to attract and convince society to rely on public transport rather than private vehicles. Authorities
also
 should set a law that
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 gas emissions from factories to force them to use renewable sources of energy
such
 as solar and wind power. The public
also
 has a vital role
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this
 issue
for instance
 they can use bicycles to commute
instead
 of using vehicles or perhaps public transport would be more effective for long-distance journeys. Recycling waste
such
 as plastic bags and paper.
To conclude
, global warming can be tackled if we are more responsible.
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task response
The essay addresses the causes of global warming and suggests measures for both governments and individuals to tackle the issue. However, some points could be further developed to provide a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, providing a clear outline of the essay. The main points are supported throughout the essay, contributing to a coherent structure.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion outlining the causes of global warming and proposed measures.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured essay with logical progression of ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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