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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Learning different languages
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 beneficial to people all around the world. Some are of the opinion
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 living in a country whose
language
 is different
than
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one
’s mother tongue may cause many difficulties for individuals. I undoubtedly agree with
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viewpoint
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view point
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 and will attempt to explain my reasons properly. The most significant problem is
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 to social issues. People in
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a different
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part
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parts
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 of a country or even
city
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a city
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 have
unique
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 and separate
accent
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 which can
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on
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the non
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non native
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 population to understand.
For example
, when I
first
 moved to London, I had real problems
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listening even though my English level was advanced. Some people’s accents would be easily understood while some
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sounds
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 unintelligible.
Therefore
, to communicate with locals
one
 needs to practice listening to different dialects to improve
his
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skills.
Furthermore
, if
one
 ‘s intention is to study abroad, he should comprehend the academic
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 an excellent and fluent rate. If he does not perceive the lectures and speeches
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 in classrooms,
then
 will not be able to follow the topic and will
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 the whole point. In regards, he may consider not taking part in seminars and feel isolated which leads to
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 in final exams. So
the
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language
 plays a key role in
future
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the future
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 success of
one
 in overseas To sum up, knowing
language
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the language
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 of a region is a necessity and
have
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 vital
impacts
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 on the
immigrants
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immigrant's
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 lives. If
one
 does not know
usage
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the usage
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 of a
language
,
may
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one may
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 encounter difficulties while communicating and
education
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 in overseas countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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